“Your story is missing an attention grabber,” Mr. Larson criticized. “You want to start with something that makes the reader want more. It’s like baiting a fish.” He curled his finger and used it to pull his cheek away from his face for emphasis.
Annie scowled at the big capital D on her paper. “You gave me a D just because you didn’t like the way I started my story?”
“It’s hard to give you a better grade on something I’m not going to read.”