Click the pic for the original challenge. Written for Pirate’s Līgo Haībun Challenge
~ Prompt “Melt”.
Ravenous, inspiration finds me. Hidden deep beneath the ice of yesterday’s tears, Bête Noire skillfully hunts its prey. I huddle still, frozen by my terror of the words themselves, and it smells my fear. Teeth of raw emotion tear at my heart. Jaws of painful memory grind the bits of rended flesh. I cry out in anguish, and my tears flow from my fingertips.
Sated, inspiration abandons me. My trembling husk is consumed from within. Numb consolation stares back at me from the page, the words spilled upon it beating with the essence of my ravaged heart. Grim satisfaction offers me peace, but I no longer have a place to put it. So I sit shivering in the liquid passion that frozen could not save me.
passion finds my heart
the wall of ice drips away
leaves a pool of tears
© 2013 Anne Schilde
Nicely done! Love the Haiku
Thank you! I was following Pirate’s instructions for the challenge.
Oh this is made for you! I’m truly stunned. When word are written so luxuriously but with such raw emotion and suffering it is truly gorgeous. I am quickly staring to see haibun is truly an art form. The ensemble of passage with the haiku really works.
I wrote a piece, Little Boxes II, where the story was wrapped in a two-stanza poem… kind of a similar idea. I’m glad I could do a haibun for you. Like I said, I usually avoid the restrictions, but I did enjoy this and the other two I did too:
Just One Minute
Flash Fiction
Beautiful talent.
Thanks, Deana!
Surreal
Powerful
Masterful
I am in awe
JzB
I cry a lot. Thanks for reading, Jazz!
love the polar elements.
Did you just leave a pun in my comments, Thu? ♥
bahahaha.
This is really exceptional! Raw, beautiful…almost like a tear forming…filled with so many other layers of emotions…and then I can see it running dawn a cheek…and disappearing when the haiku ends…
I was just commenting on the Joyful haiku on your blog when I saw this. Are you going to do “Melt?” My deeper inspiration was actually a conversation with Joe (above) but because of my fascination with William T. Cox’ Squonk creature. I’m sure I was one in a former life.
Ah! Anne. Such an amazing post. Loved these lines so much.. You are a magician and have a way with words..:-) “Teeth of raw emotion tear at my heart. Jaws of painful memory grind the bits of rendered flesh. I cry out in anguish, and my tears flow from my fingertips.” Such perfection.. And the haiku in the end completes it. Very well written, as always..:-)
Thanks, muZer! Sometimes writing really feels like that, just a pool of tears. I’m glad you liked the metaphor!
I’m impressed how you can show your feelings so I really feel with you. Very good.
Showing feelings is why I write. I’m glad you felt them, Björn. Thank you.
very well done, Anne
Thank you, nightlake. I was actually really excited by the melting in tears inspiration because it helped me finish a fictitious anecdote I wrote back around Thanksgiving.
wow. i’m momentarily at lost for words…your haibun entry deeply moved me. i agree with nightlake…very well done. <3
Hi, Sunshine! Thank you. I saw Pirate sent you an invitation. Will you be doing one?
hey, Anne…well, i’m hoping to get one out but if i miss it, i will check for the next one. it will be a good writing practice for me…have a great week! <3
So I sit shivering in the liquid passion that frozen could not save me. – it’s a fantastic closing line. there were so many other great lines i won’t anymore mention… i really enjoyed your choice or words — very rich.
Thanks, kz! Personifying something intangible that way was fun.
Beautiful!
Thank you!
Love the way you sustained the imagery in your personification here!
Oh thank you! I used to get really lousy grades on that!